Solar System 3.7

@corex aye thanks a lot man, I appreciate your opinion man, I do agree with what you said (mainly the strife part as strive is the correct word) as well, I just did this for school lol, thanks a ton, live long and prosper
Another important thing, if you wish to make crafts and planets and need help or guidance, don't hesitate to ask me, just type @Aludra877 and I may see it (may because the website doesn't always notify you when someone pings you)

@Aludra877 Hey! That was a really cool poem you wrote about the solar system. I liked it a lot.
You put a lot of big ideas into it, like how important the solar system is because we live here, and how we want to explore and discover new things. You also talked about how technology helps us do that.
I thought it was really good how you kept the rhyming going, and it flowed nicely when I read it. You also had some strong pictures in my head, like when you said "Terran passion burning like a Furnace." That's a strong way to say it!
Just a couple of small thoughts for next time, if you want to make it even stronger:
You said "Sol system" and "Solar system." Both are fine, but maybe just pick one and stick with it so it sounds super smooth.
Also, when you said "strife," you might have meant "strive" or "try hard," because "strife" usually means fighting. But I got what you meant!
And you used "birthright" twice. It's a powerful word, but sometimes changing it up a little the second time can make it feel fresh.
The ending was really good, when you talked about why we fight when we could all work together. That made me think.
Overall, it's a really great poem. You clearly care a lot about space, and it shows!

@Aludra877 I think it's our reality

hey man, not too long ago in english class we were asked to prepare an ode poem, so I made an ode to the solar system, here it is:
Ode to the Solar system

Oh Sol system, being the only known, to sport life.

It is for you that our species shall strife.

Allowing us to live, discover, wonder and evolve.

Making us ask questions, in which we must solve.

Although mostly inhospitable.

Colonization once thought to be improbable.

You gave us challenge, you gave us purpose.

Our Terran passion burning like a Furnace.

When we crave what we want, we find our way

as technology, our saviour and creation comes into play.

The Sol system holds many boons for civilization

in which is our Birthright to claim, and we shall be ready for the occasion.

Like sol, the Stars are our birthright to conquer.

One day we shall expand from Terra, and maybe leave her...

Yet now fragile beings, why do you yearn to fight?

When we can indeed Unite?

just do tell me what you think

Very interesting. It looks really good.

Now, I don't want to sound impolite, but personally I think it would be even better if the values were closer to reality; some numbers are perfectly fine, but others are off by a lot.

Thank you for your time, friend. I appreciate your work.